Ex Husband and Wife

Title : Ex Husband and Wife
URL : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/teriyaki182/
Author : Teriyaki18
Reviewed by SueWey @ Crepuscular Tears
 
Title: 4/5
I like the title, though it isn’t that catchy enough to actually grab my attention but it does fit your story quite well.
 
Poster/Background: 10/10
Oh, I’m loving your poster ( HAHA )! Nice selection of colors and pictures, though I prefer the girl not to smile since this story is kinda depressing ( well, it’s more to the sad side than the happy side, haha! ). Plus, I like the quote on your poster ( ^^ ).
 
Forewords: 10/10
Nothing much to say here. It was well written out, though it was in a common way but never failed to keep me going!
 
Plot: 12/15
Nice plot you had there, though there were some predictable scenes in the story for me and I don’t know, it just didn’t really grab my attention to the fullest ( maybe cause I’ve read this several times already, teehee ). But, I did got all hooked up at the they-almost-had-sex scene ( ROFL! HAHA, sorry folks. This reviewer is slightly horny xD ).
 
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
Yeah, I’d say you had a nice plot but when it comes to originality, it’s a no-no. I understand that this plot is purely from your own brain, and that you did not plagiarize from anywhere but I have read stories very similar to this as well ( then again, these days is hard to find plots that are very fresh and new so I didn’t actually deduct your marks fully ).
As for your creativity, it was fine. Nothing much to say ( ^^ ).
 
Flow: 9/10
Your flow was perfect at the beginning but when it was reaching to its end, it was quite sudden. I understand that you don’t want to put anymore drama in the story but it would be best if you keep it going instead of leaving us hanging there. I’m sure that all of us, readers, ( okay, maybe not all but most of us ) would like to know what happened when Lin’s parents saw them hugging and what happened next.
 
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
Give a round of applause to yourself cause I did not spot any spelling mistakes ( yay! ). Not everyone can avoid that ya know.
However, I did spot a few minor grammar mistakes here and there such as in chapter 4 where you wrote;
‘Or have her knees goes weak at his sexy gaze.’
It should’ve been;
‘Or have her knees go weak at this sexy gaze.’
Vocabulary was above average.
 
Characterization: 10/10
Everything was fine. You’ve described your characters very well and I have no problem with that.
 
Writing Style: 10/10
I’ve nothing much to say here as well. Everything seems fine here; it was neat, understandable and detailed. Give another round of applause for yourself ( ^^ )!
 
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I enjoyed reading it very much though not to the fullest (:
Hope you’re satisfied your review! And, sorry that I took quite awhile to finish your request!
 
Bonus: -/5
 
Total: 86/100